Peer Review

I am peer reviewing a colleagues draft of project three, and my first reaction is that this draft is a solid starting point. The author used great examples to support her argument that Philadelphia in the eyes of a local looks nothing like Philadelphia through the eyes of a tourist. To make her paper stronger, I recommend that she uses more rhetorical moves, such as incorporating similes and metaphors to make her examples stronger. Starting in the first paragraph, she successfully used parenthesis helping her to accent what is important about her points. If she takes her strong examples and elaborates upon them her Philadelphia paper will form a strong argument that the reader will enjoy reading.